Friday, January 14, 2011

Rolling In The Deep

...is my newest temporary favorite song, sung by Adele. It sort of fits with the story below the picture. I swear I'm not totally random. At the moment.

Janet Reid had a writing contest several days ago and the winners were announced this morning. Alas, I am again NOT a winner of one of these contests she has periodically, but I find the exercise of writing a story in a hundred words or less using a few specific words tossed in a bit of fun (this time was abnegation, candor, dauntless, amity, and erudite). It's sort of like a puzzle. She's doing it again, so jaunt over to her blog tomorrow afternoon to enter for an ARC of "Divergent."

I don't actually need to link any of you to Janet Reid, do I?

Anyhoo, I rather liked my entry this time and wanted to share it with you guys. Hope you like it.




Foolish. Harsher words exist.

I tossed amity between our clans aside to burrow into his arms. I mistook abnegation for strength. Once dauntless and cunning, my cleared vision knew him a traitor and a fiend. Warmonger by proxy.

I’m no one’s scapegoat. My mistakes; my debt. I’ll pay none but mine.

Autumn leaves above mocked me. I’d been gone too long. I awaited my fate before a ring of erudite men who decided all. Candor was my only ally now.

“I was ignorant.”

They agreed.

“My penance?” I assumed my return.

“Death.”

“His?”

“Yes.”

“Done.”

Forgiveness with blood. Easy terms.

12 comments:

Roland D. Yeomans said...

Interesting. And necessarily vague with the 100 word limit. I admire your tenacity at continuing to enter these contests. I hope you do better next time, Roland

Alleged Author said...

Oooh! I love how good this is even though it's short. Makes me want to read more!

The Words Crafter said...

I don't know how you are able to get so much across, to hint, and HOOK, with so few words. I'm glad you stick with it.

I loved it and want to read more.

Charity Bradford said...

Christi, I thought this was chillingly good! Keep at it and you'll catch her eye eventually, and if not, I sure enjoyed this.

Emily White said...

This was beautiful! I've thought about doing Janet's writing contests, but I can never think of something that seems to be her particular style. Oh well.

This was great, Christi! :)

Jennifer Hillier said...

Great entry! Chilling ending.

Sarah Ahiers said...

LOVE the last two sentences! Very nice!

Hannah said...

What a powerful piece in just a few lines. Great job!

A.M. Kuska said...

Actually, I loved your entry too, although I think "enmity" might have been a better word...maybe cause it's actually in my vocabulary. ^^

Tamara Narayan said...

This was a great piece. I've entered her contests three or four times and never won or even got an honorable mention. It seems the funny/quirky entries fair better than the serious ones.

Lisa Gail Green said...

I like the story. Nice ending.

Unknown said...

qihang0907,coach factory outlet
coach factory outlet online
ray ban uk
michael kors handbags
air max
marc jacobs outlet
louis vuitton outlet
uggs australia
louis vuitton outlet
ray ban uk store
celine handbags
concord 11
louis vuitton handbags
instyler curling iron
copy watches
louis vuitton handbags
louis vuitton outlet
retro 11
michael kors handbags
celine outlet
louis vuitton outlet
louis vuitton
true religion outlet
michael kors bags
michael kors
louis vuitton outlet
michael kors outlet
louis vuitton
air jordan 8
wholesale jerseys
toms outlet
true religion jeans
jordan shoes
uggs for men
coach outlet online
louis vuitton
longchamp soldes
michael kors outlet
q