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Friday, January 14, 2011

Rolling In The Deep

...is my newest temporary favorite song, sung by Adele. It sort of fits with the story below the picture. I swear I'm not totally random. At the moment.

Janet Reid had a writing contest several days ago and the winners were announced this morning. Alas, I am again NOT a winner of one of these contests she has periodically, but I find the exercise of writing a story in a hundred words or less using a few specific words tossed in a bit of fun (this time was abnegation, candor, dauntless, amity, and erudite). It's sort of like a puzzle. She's doing it again, so jaunt over to her blog tomorrow afternoon to enter for an ARC of "Divergent."

I don't actually need to link any of you to Janet Reid, do I?

Anyhoo, I rather liked my entry this time and wanted to share it with you guys. Hope you like it.




Foolish. Harsher words exist.

I tossed amity between our clans aside to burrow into his arms. I mistook abnegation for strength. Once dauntless and cunning, my cleared vision knew him a traitor and a fiend. Warmonger by proxy.

I’m no one’s scapegoat. My mistakes; my debt. I’ll pay none but mine.

Autumn leaves above mocked me. I’d been gone too long. I awaited my fate before a ring of erudite men who decided all. Candor was my only ally now.

“I was ignorant.”

They agreed.

“My penance?” I assumed my return.

“Death.”

“His?”

“Yes.”

“Done.”

Forgiveness with blood. Easy terms.

12 comments:

  1. Interesting. And necessarily vague with the 100 word limit. I admire your tenacity at continuing to enter these contests. I hope you do better next time, Roland

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  2. Oooh! I love how good this is even though it's short. Makes me want to read more!

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  3. I don't know how you are able to get so much across, to hint, and HOOK, with so few words. I'm glad you stick with it.

    I loved it and want to read more.

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  4. Christi, I thought this was chillingly good! Keep at it and you'll catch her eye eventually, and if not, I sure enjoyed this.

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  5. This was beautiful! I've thought about doing Janet's writing contests, but I can never think of something that seems to be her particular style. Oh well.

    This was great, Christi! :)

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  6. LOVE the last two sentences! Very nice!

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  7. What a powerful piece in just a few lines. Great job!

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  8. Actually, I loved your entry too, although I think "enmity" might have been a better word...maybe cause it's actually in my vocabulary. ^^

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  9. This was a great piece. I've entered her contests three or four times and never won or even got an honorable mention. It seems the funny/quirky entries fair better than the serious ones.

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